Eye For An Eye: 2nd Draft

Eye For An Eye: Trailer Feedback

Nicole and I have made significant changes to our trailer, with the intention of making it more scary with quick shots and fast paced non-diegetic music. We have produced a first draft and have received feedback from our teachers, other class members and our target audience in general. We have learnt that our trailer is efficient and successful in the sense that we have been able to incorporate the majority of the key components a professional trailer has. It had taken Nicole and I quite a while to find relevant, fast-paced non-diegetic music that would fit in perfectly with the theme of our trailer. Our first draft trailer did not have non-diegetic music, and therefore it looked very unprofessional and slow. As our film genre is a Horror-Thriller, it has to be quick and sharp, and with the non-diegetic music lacking, it didn't do the trailer justice. We have been told that we only need 1 or 2 seconds of footage to show the audience what is going on. However, Nicole and I have created 5 second clips which slows the essence of the trailer down. This means that when producing these amendments we have to guarantee that we have good music and faster shots, to entice our target audience.

I think that Nicole and I have been too concerned about how our story is evolving that we have included too many shots of the beginning, middle and ending of our actual storyline. This implies that we are giving away most of our storyline which is not an ideal for our target audience. Therefore we will be cutting up each scene and dispersing it through the trailer as we feel appropriate. We have also been given feedback of re-watching other horror trailers consisting of 'The Ring' to remind Nicole and I of how many and in particular how short and ambiguous the shots are. As well as quick shots, longer shots are also needed for the most important and prestigious, whereas the short takes are needed for building up climax. We will use longer shots for the narrative so that the audience can read it easily, because on one of our shots, there is a long text message which will take long to read and therefore we will slow that particular shot down. Other feedback consists of cutting out the text message seen altogether and therefore interpret what the text message says and put it into practice.

There is an antagonist and a protagonist in our film and therefore to show their superiority and inferiority, we need to use a variety of different shot types to emphasise this. As Nicole and I have used a limited amount of shot types, we need to re-shoot at least one scene so that we can incorporate close-ups and extreme close-ups which are extremely frequent within the Horror-Thriller theme. Nicole and I have decided that we are going to use these shot types for the killer so that we do not give her away too soon in the trailer. There is one shot where our killer is immediately revealed and immediately all tension is lost because she is being revealed so early on. Instead, Nicole and I intend to cut this scene out completely as it reveals the killer and it slows down the tempo. Rather, Nicole and I will film parts of the killer such as her foot, hand, eye but not a prolonged shot of the whole figure. With the intention of improving our trailer and getting the highest marks possible in terms of the production mark-scheme, Nicole and I will make a considerable amount of progress for our second draft trailer.

Eye For An Eye: Feedback Poster - Website

Eye For An Eye: First Draft Poster - Website

Editing

Nicole and I have been visiting the muse many a time, with the intention of producing a good first draft trailer. We have been having some difficulties in terms of Final Cut Pro, but we have managed to insert all our footage on Final Cut Pro and have been starting to put the clips and scenes in order to put together the story of our trailer. Through researching different types of sounds that would be relevant for our trailer, Nicole and I visiting sites such as Soundcloud, Jamendo and Free Play Music to explore the different types of non-diegetic sounds that we will incur in the background of our trailer. After having researched sound clips we previously found 'This is the end - Royalty Free Music (Watermarked)" but after having done a substantial amount of work on the trailer, it was a mutual decision to change it to "Death Star" which fits in with both Horror and Thriller conventions. At this point, Nicole and I have been able to put our footage onto to Final Cut Pro and put the clips in order. Nicole and I will be getting feedback on our trailer from our teachers, classmates and our target audience.

Dead Man Down Trailer - Inspiration

Whilst researching other films from the Horror / Thriller genre, I came across this flm, where the storyline is very similar to ours. The main theme covered is revenge and death which is what our trailer is also about. At the beginning it states that the killer killed this man's wife and child and is after him. This is similar to our trailer in the sense that our killer is out to seek revenge on a man's wife, after having killed his mother and father. I also think that this trailer is very effective in its quick shots, fast-paced non-diegetic sound representing the thriller genre as well as the effective narrative, where one states "The Best Revenge thriller in Years" from Radio 5 Live. Overall, I intend to use this as inspiration for the making of our trailer.